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Rebel Angel by ~blushingsilly07:iconblushingsilly07:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Emotional


She whispered her passion
With the heat of a scream

I pretended not to notice
As her reality became a dream

She told me she would catch me
Only she’s too close to the ground

So she referred me to an angel
Who wasn’t quite so bound

       Oh earth angel,
Your frowns are like thorns
God must’ve been in a rebel mood
When he tied on your wings

       Oh rebel angel,
Your song is hardcore
God must’ve been in a rebel mood
When he sent you
      To me
©2004-2009 ~blushingsilly07
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~lost-tortured-soul:iconlost-tortured-soul: Mar 2, 2004, 11:23:50 AM
Great poem, I like it! :)

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"Bury it... I won't let you bury it... I won't let you smother it... I won't let you murder it..."-Muse

"That's the end of the Beoulves... Names do not matter. What matters is how you live your life."-Ramza, FFT

"When Angels deserve to die..."-SOAD
~frankienexus:iconfrankienexus: Mar 2, 2004, 11:34:41 AM
there is so much going on in this, so many meanings so much to think about,

it pulls at me and pushes at me

it takes me on an emotional rollercoaster ride


Frankie

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~delphoric:icondelphoric: Mar 2, 2004, 11:35:11 AM
The end of the poem feel out of place. Namely the last two stanzas. Maybe it is just me.

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~phoenixreal:iconphoenixreal: Mar 2, 2004, 11:58:41 AM
Very interesting piece. It would be good to have some more description, but its still a well written piece as is. Nice job.

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:blackrose:blessed be~*~phoenixreal:blackrose:

Without the darkness, there can be no light. Without the light, there can be no dark. Between, there casts the shadow. I am that shadow.
~blushingsilly07:iconblushingsilly07: Mar 2, 2004, 12:09:37 PM
yes there was in awful lot in this. i fear that maybe there was too much, it was a bit choppy. probably because it was about two different people
~blushingsilly07:iconblushingsilly07: Mar 2, 2004, 12:10:45 PM
thank you very much. i'll keep in mind what you said about discription, i think it was a bit choppy, maybe that's what's wrong
~frankienexus:iconfrankienexus: Mar 2, 2004, 12:12:40 PM
no u got that across very well, in fact it made it (as a poem) richer

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I love your comments and your textures
~blushingsilly07:iconblushingsilly07: Mar 2, 2004, 12:13:05 PM
sigh, im sorry, i agree it was a bit choppy - probably because it was about two different people. but, the places it did take you, was it worth while?
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